Randie Mayo's sign inventory this week not only offers up a fine example of what we are trying to do with these inventories but also gives insight and instruction in the process of creative erasure, which Dr. Davidson has so highly recommended.
In order to clarify my response, I have italicized Randie's most instructive signs.
Poem: “Revision” by Carl Phillips
1. The recursive image of erasure appears several times in the poem, yet ends with the idea of recognition.
This is precisely what we are trying to accomplish through our multiple drafts by expanding and compression with creative erasure.
2. The poem begins with a question of identity and ends with the speaker calling the subject to speak first in which he will answer.
I too found this a compelling ending that seems to summarize all that we are trying to do by putting aside, or deferring meaning, with faith that the poem will develop meaning on it's own.
6. The recursivity of concrete, pastoral images, such a “leaves,” “wind,” and “river” are often paired with more abstract concepts, such as the “mind,” “trust,” “belief,” etc.
Something very unlikely to occur without consistent and trusting revision
10. The language of seems to shift from the static existence of the speaker to the active existence of the pastoral.
also something that we hope to happen with revision the effect of something greater moving through the poet than the poet can initially put into words.
The last lines in this poem are particularly telling concerning what Dr. Davidson is asking us to do.
"slowing down that part of me that would walk past, or as if away towards another ending--you speak first and I'll answer"
Nice job here Randie.
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